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Kim Ki-rim · 김기림

rePlacing Kim Ki-rim in the Natural World

By Peter N. Liptak

“The trouble of a translation is that it is limited by the words of the original and yet the translator is sometimes allowed a bit of leeway to interpret and add to the rhythm, flow and color of the language.”

Peter N. Liptak
English

World’s Morning

A scale Rising Over the strait As a snake’s back Arching to life and… Revealing the spotted Arabian clothes enclosed in the young mountains…

Opening passage · English

Such was the morning to which Kim Ki-rim awoke, born to a world of rapid change and encroaching predators. But he was also born into a dark day for Korea in which Korean men were subjugated to the Japanese world order. In response to this, Korean poets emphatically embraced their Koreanness by writing in the vernacular and attempting to break free of the restraints of the old ways of Choson with a grasp at modernism in poetry. Kim Ki-rim was such a poet, who looked toward achieving a new imagery in poetry that could prove Korean to be as diverse and beautiful as the languages of the western modernists.

With the rise of modern poetry, grammar virtually vanished and the reader is left to imagine, imply and infer the meanings through suggestions, carefully constructed often with allusions to their plight under the foul rule of the Japanese. These feelings could not be expressed for fear of retaliation so the poets took to expressing their national resistance by writing about man’s place in nature and about the sufferings of rural societies. Kim Ki-rim drew for us pictures of man still close to nature with illusions to the powerlessness and vulnerability of Koreans in the Japanese colony.

Following the massacres of 1919 and the failure of the march first movement to generate sufficient international notice of Korea’s plight, the people’s predominant sentiment developed into a dreary lingering despair. Kim, like many other poets of his time, wrote in such a mood while feeling his way down the road in a bitter storm. While several of his poems have promise, I found many of them to be variously grammatically incomprehensible, often awkward and at times overly simplistic. In “The Sea and the Butterfly” such language enters the fold…

English & Korean

The Sea and the Butterfly · 바다와 나비

Because no one told her how deep The white butterfly was utterly unafraid of the sea 아모도 그에게 수심(水深)을 일러 준 일이 없기에 힌 나비는 도모지 바다가 무섭지 않다. Believing the (vast) blue a patch of blue radish, she descended Young wings made limp, salted by a (sudden) swell The innocent princess soaked returned sodden (to shore) 청(靑)무우밭인가 해서 나려 갔다가는 어린 날개가 물결에 저러서 공주처럼 지처서 도라온다. The flowers of the March sea unopened, the sad Butterfly’s belly ached (in chase) for the chill of the deep blue crescent moon. 삼월달 바다가 꽃이 피지 않어서 서거푼 나비 허리에 새파란 초생달이 시리다.

English and Korean · (1939년 4월)

“The Rock” further exemplifies the simple choices of his speech patterns that might reveal something more with some coaching…

English & Korean

The Rock · 바위

No choice but to face the shore, lying prostrate The waves’ white whip Without a word, cracks at the beaten back Of the old rock 육지로 향하야 업드려저서 물결의 흰 채찍에 말없이 등을 얻어맞은 늙은 바위.

English and Korean

The trouble of a translation is that it is limited by the words of the original and yet the translator is sometimes allowed a bit of leeway to interpret and add to the rhythm, flow and color of the language. If we take such translator’s license, the poem might transform in English from a Rock to a Boulder in a step beyond what Kim may have intended…

English

The Boulder

Wedged belly deep in the seeping sand Forever prostrate, facing shore The waves’ white whip Without a word cracks at the beaten back Of the age old boulder

Peter N. Liptak · Alternative rendering

The hopeless bitterness of the message comes out with more force. Koreans “Solitude”, similarly holds for us (and for Koreans of the time) little hope for the future…

English & Korean

Solitude · 고독

Falling on my back in the blue sands In perfect loneliness such as the seal Even the favor of the cold moonbeam caressing my brow Does more harm to my mounting anger. 푸른 모래밭에 자빠져서 나는 물개와 같이 완전히 외롭다. 이마를 어르만지는 찬 달빛의 은혜조차 오히려 화가 난다.

English and Korean

A step in a new direction takes us on a tour of words…

English

Solitude

Falling aback in blue sands Lingering in the loneliness As the last look of a single seal Scanning the vast sea. Unwelcome caresses Of cold moonbeams across my brow Do not favor My mounting madness My indiscriminant anger.

Peter N. Liptak · Alternative rendering

With “The Waiting Room” we finally see some hope for the future steal into the fold. What was it that came on that train that brought forth such optimism? Love, no. Maybe a new ideal or a bit of desirable news, a novelty, a digression, a venture, an endeavor, who knows…

English & Korean

The Waiting Room · 대합실

The waiting room ever bright, like a tulip Everyone there like a flag… Harbors the hope of a fresh departure 대합실은 언제든지 투-립 처럼 밝고나. 누구나 거기서는 깃빨처럼 출발의 히망을 가지고 있다.

English and Korean

A more careful step forward, even within the realm of reason…

English

The Waiting Room

Tulip bright, the waiting room ever light, Its patrons, flags in their flurry… Harboring hopes of fresh departures

Peter N. Liptak · Alternative rendering

In the end, the poems of Kim Ki-rim strike one as having a fresh sense of image as he creates pleasant pastels of the Korean landscape, his allusions, though lacking in depth and his use of words could be coaxed into more colorful rhythms and tighter stylistics. To an outsider, Kim’s poetry seems a bit self indulgent and 좀 유지해요. And again with the March to Sunday we see the experimentation of a youthful poet in need of the tides of time to come out with truths that make a poem a work more than just an exercise…

English & Korean

The Sunday March · 일요일(日曜日) 행진곡(行進曲)

Moon [Monday] Fire [Tuesday] Water [Wednesday] Wood [Thursday] Gold [Friday] Earth [Saturday] One two One two The sound of the march to Sunday… 월(月)   화(火)     수(水)       목(木)         금(金)           토(土) 하낫 둘   하낫 둘 일요일로 나가는 `엇둘' 소리…… Nature’s cruelty You place At history’s hole… The spirit’s health… Sunday to the field To the sea… 자연의 학대에서 너를 놓아라 역사의 여백…… 영혼의 위생 데이…… 일요일의 들로 바다로…… Our Delightful Heavens and a day Sunday Sunday 우리들의 유쾌한 하늘과 하루 일요일   일요일

English and Korean · Indentation retained